Storyboard

Due to some technical problems, it has not allowed me to copy and paste the joint document which was in our group, therefore I have had to use a fellow group member's photos of the storyboard.

Audience feedback 2

Yesterday we showed the second cut of our film and took notes on the opinions of our fellow classmates, the feedback that we received follows as such:

• We have a segment of the film which is unfilmed right now, which we intend to fill with a monster emerging in a cupboard symbolising the young girls fears, we were told that this would be hard to make so that it wasn't "cheesey" and therefore we should add an effect to it, like a blur effect to make it seem like there is actual fear and not just a person in a mask.
• We were also told that in the argument scene, the fact that the mother is lower down than the father suggests that we are attempting to have a power divide with the male being stronger however unsuccessfully, however this was not our intention, as we had no intention of making a power split, yet we took into account the feedback which was to have the dad maybe holding the mother's shoulder's so it looks like he is in control, however this is only if we were to incorporate a power divide, which we may well do.
• once again we received the advice from the first cut of the film, was that the mother seems too happy, however in our opinions she does not therefore we may not change this.

This was the main feedback that we received, we hope to make relevant changes for the 3rd cut of our film. There is great importance of artist research as it allows us to reflect on our film and make changes accordingly.

Audience feedback 1

We typed up a questionnaire and asked 9 people, friends and family of varied ages what they thought of our film. These are the results from the questionnaire:

Do you like the overall idea for my video?

Yes.

Do you think the screenplay will match the song well?

Yes, it shows emotion, something the song seems to be about.

What part do you think will be most effective?

The birds.

What part do you think will be least effective?

Nothing.

What do you think could be improved?

Nothing, as long as it can be pulled off.

Do you like the ideas for the costumes? Comments?

They fit criteria well

Do you think the setting is appropriate? Comments?

Yes.

Do you have any other suggestions?

No.
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Do you like the overall idea for my video?
Yes.
Do you think the screenplay will match the song well?
Yes.
What part do you think will be most effective?
The bit with the doll.
What part do you think will be least effective?
None.
What do you think could be improved?
None.
Do you like the ideas for the costumes? Comments?
Yeah they go with colour connotations.
Do you think the setting is appropriate? Comments?
Yes the contrast between England and exotic birds will be good.
Do you have any other suggestions?
Nope
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Do you like the overall idea for my video?
It sounds good.
Do you think the screenplay will match the song well?
Yeah, probably.
What part do you think will be most effective?
The end part seems pretty vital. The bit with the girl running away.
What part do you think will be least effective?
Nothing.
What do you think could be improved?
Nothing.
Do you like the ideas for the costumes? Comments?
They seem cool.
Do you think the setting is appropriate? Comments?
Yes because you’ve included dark elements like the woods... emotion.
Do you have any other suggestions?
Edit carefully.
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Do you like the overall idea for my video?
Not really, it sounds too chaotic.
Do you think the screenplay will match the song well?
It really depends on how well you edit it.
What part do you think will be most effective?
The birds if you can pull them off.
What part do you think will be least effective?
The characters? I don’t know how well the acting will come across.
What do you think could be improved?
Try and make your ideas more obvious
Do you like the ideas for the costumes? Comments?
Yes.
Do you think the setting is appropriate? Comments?
Yeah I don’t see downsides.
Do you have any other suggestions?
Try and put across your message more obviously.
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Do you like the overall idea for my video?
Yes it sounds good!
Do you think the screenplay will match the song well?
Yes.
What part do you think will be most effective?
It all sounds very effective.
What part do you think will be least effective?
Nothing.
What do you think could be improved?
Nothing.
Do you like the ideas for the costumes? Comments?
Yes.
Do you think the setting is appropriate? Comments?
I’m not sure, it could be risky when filming but on a nice day then yes.
Do you have any other suggestions?
Check the weather forecast!
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Do you like the overall idea for my video?
Yeah!
Do you think the screenplay will match the song well?
I think so. The message shown sounds good.
What part do you think will be most effective?
The imaginary friend being the doll!
What part do you think will be least effective?
Maybe the birds? It will have to take good editing.
What do you think could be improved?
Nothing.
Do you like the ideas for the costumes? Comments?
You could make them more symbolic?
Do you think the setting is appropriate? Comments?
Yes it shows nature, something inevitable for everyone.
Do you have any other suggestions?
Have fun filming!
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Do you like the overall idea for my video?
It sounds interesting, I’d like to see the turn out.
Do you think the screenplay will match the song well?
Probably yes!
What part do you think will be most effective?
Where the lead runs through the woods, I like the messages here.
What part do you think will be least effective?
The monster in the closet doesn’t seem very symbolic but I still would like to see it.
What do you think could be improved?
You could maybe make the characters seem more strange to represent her strange view on life
Do you like the ideas for the costumes? Comments?
Yeah they go well with the characters
Do you think the setting is appropriate? Comments?
It’s okay, it’s nothing amazing.
Do you have any other suggestions?
Make sure you think everything through symbolically first.
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Do you like the overall idea for my video?
Yeah.
Do you think the screenplay will match the song well?
Yes.
What part do you think will be most effective?
The monster.
What part do you think will be least effective?
Nothing.
What do you think could be improved?
Nothing.
Do you like the ideas for the costumes? Comments?
Yeah!
Do you think the setting is appropriate? Comments?
Yeah.
Do you have any other suggestions?
No
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Do you like the overall idea for my video?
Yes I do.
Do you think the screenplay will match the song well?
I think so if done well, it seems to match the story.
What part do you think will be most effective?
Birds
What part do you think will be least effective?
Nothing
What do you think could be improved?
Nothing
Do you like the ideas for the costumes? Comments?
Yes
Do you think the setting is appropriate? Comments?
I like it.
Do you have any other suggestions?
No I don't.